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== second paragraph == | |||
The second paragraph comes from out of the blue, doesn't relate to the first paragraph at all, and, unless, the reader already knows a lot about the Battle of Britain, is essentially meaningless. For instance: "the fighters" -- what fighters? what were they doing? why? "the radars" -- what radars? etc. etc. I hesitate to simply delete the whole paragraph, but it should either be greatly expanded, greatly rewritten, or moved somewhere else. [[User:Hayford Peirce|Hayford Peirce]] 00:16, 17 June 2008 (CDT) | |||
Revision as of 23:16, 16 June 2008
second paragraph
The second paragraph comes from out of the blue, doesn't relate to the first paragraph at all, and, unless, the reader already knows a lot about the Battle of Britain, is essentially meaningless. For instance: "the fighters" -- what fighters? what were they doing? why? "the radars" -- what radars? etc. etc. I hesitate to simply delete the whole paragraph, but it should either be greatly expanded, greatly rewritten, or moved somewhere else. Hayford Peirce 00:16, 17 June 2008 (CDT)