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== First (instructor) evaluation comments == | |||
Hi Andrew, | |||
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. Beyond the obvious need to write the article's later sections, some steps you might take to improve the sections you've already been developing include the following: | |||
* You might restructure the "History" section so that the "Founding" subsection comes first. You can create your own subsection headings to frame the organization of the remainder of the section. | |||
* You might elaborate a bit more on the historical context and rationale for the NRA's post-Civil War founding. What is the significance of Samuel Colt's manufacturing facility? What finally prompted the NRA's formation in 1871? How did its founders get it off the ground? What were its early activities and goals? | |||
* Still in the history section, you might explain what led the NRA to form its Legislative Affairs Division in 1934 and ILA in 1975. Along the same lines, you mention that the NRA of the mid-1930s didn't really lobby; when did it begin to do so and why? | |||
* You might flesh out the "Related Articles" subpage a bit more with some of the people and other terms mentioned in your main page -- e.g. ''America's 1st Freedom''; Ambrose Burnside. | |||
[[User:Shamira Gelbman|Shamira Gelbman]] 23:59, 1 October 2009 (UTC) | |||
== Second (peer) evaluation comments == | |||
Revision as of 17:59, 1 October 2009
First (instructor) evaluation comments
Hi Andrew,
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. Beyond the obvious need to write the article's later sections, some steps you might take to improve the sections you've already been developing include the following:
- You might restructure the "History" section so that the "Founding" subsection comes first. You can create your own subsection headings to frame the organization of the remainder of the section.
- You might elaborate a bit more on the historical context and rationale for the NRA's post-Civil War founding. What is the significance of Samuel Colt's manufacturing facility? What finally prompted the NRA's formation in 1871? How did its founders get it off the ground? What were its early activities and goals?
- Still in the history section, you might explain what led the NRA to form its Legislative Affairs Division in 1934 and ILA in 1975. Along the same lines, you mention that the NRA of the mid-1930s didn't really lobby; when did it begin to do so and why?
- You might flesh out the "Related Articles" subpage a bit more with some of the people and other terms mentioned in your main page -- e.g. America's 1st Freedom; Ambrose Burnside.
Shamira Gelbman 23:59, 1 October 2009 (UTC)