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I will try to review the content tomorrow ... but keep in mind that I know very little about this subject. [[User:Milton Beychok|Milton Beychok]] 02:59, 18 August 2010 (UTC) | I will try to review the content tomorrow ... but keep in mind that I know very little about this subject. [[User:Milton Beychok|Milton Beychok]] 02:59, 18 August 2010 (UTC) | ||
:The hyperlink in Reference 4, [http://cart.nap.edu/cart/deliver.cgi?&record_id=10918&free=1 New Energetic Materials], just takes me to an page asking for email address and name and profession. I recommend that you change that to [http://books.nap.edu/ | :The hyperlink in Reference 4, [http://cart.nap.edu/cart/deliver.cgi?&record_id=10918&free=1 New Energetic Materials], just takes me to an page asking for email address and name and profession. I recommend that you change that to [http://books.nap.edu/openbook.php?record_id=10918&page=8 New Energetic Materials] which takes the reader directly to page 8 of the referenced book. If you wish, I could make that change for you ... but it might disqualify me to nominate the article for approval. Up until now, all I have done is correct a number of typos, plus cleaning up one image. [[User:Milton Beychok|Milton Beychok]] 18:43, 18 August 2010 (UTC) | ||
::Same problem with Reference 10, and here I suggest changing the current link to [http://books.nap.edu/openbook.php?record_id=10918&page=16 New Energetic Materials] which takes the reader directly to page 16 of the referenced book. [[User:Milton Beychok|Milton Beychok]] 19:01, 18 August 2010 (UTC) |
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Fixed typo
Changed firing pink to firing pin.Mary Ash 02:06, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
- -) You must admit that sounds like something that Combat Barbie would use. Howard C. Berkowitz 02:34, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
- ROFL the vision of combat Barbie...where's G.I. Joe when you need him :-)Mary Ash 02:58, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
- -) You must admit that sounds like something that Combat Barbie would use. Howard C. Berkowitz 02:34, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
Clarification
It would help to have some of the acronyms spelled out such as PBXN7. What's that?? Thanks!Mary Ash 02:12, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
- As far as I know, that's a designation, not an acronym. My guess is that it derives from PBX (explosive), with various additives. [1] describes it simply as an explosive composition from China Lake.
- Just as an example, PBX-9404 is not an acronym, but a designation for a mixture of 94% HMX (explosive), 3% NC, 3% Tris(2-chloroethyl)phosphate (CEF); I don't know what NC is. Howard C. Berkowitz 02:34, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
Part of my review that you asked for
Howard, when I started my review, the first thing that caught my eye were the three images. One of them had a very dark background that made the text hard to read ... so I revised the background to white, and I also cleaned up the somewhat blurry text in that image. The I added credit line to all three images. Hope those changes are okay by you.
I will try to review the content tomorrow ... but keep in mind that I know very little about this subject. Milton Beychok 02:59, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
- The hyperlink in Reference 4, New Energetic Materials, just takes me to an page asking for email address and name and profession. I recommend that you change that to New Energetic Materials which takes the reader directly to page 8 of the referenced book. If you wish, I could make that change for you ... but it might disqualify me to nominate the article for approval. Up until now, all I have done is correct a number of typos, plus cleaning up one image. Milton Beychok 18:43, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
- Same problem with Reference 10, and here I suggest changing the current link to New Energetic Materials which takes the reader directly to page 16 of the referenced book. Milton Beychok 19:01, 18 August 2010 (UTC)