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Note: I wrote this in association with my wife, who works at the National Fairground Archive at the University of Sheffield (U.K.). The original information was put together for an exhibit inside the university library. The inclusion of these particular World's Fairs was dictated by the reference material available within the NFA. Obviously, there have been many more World's Fairs. I suppose that reference can be made to the disastrous Millennium Dome in England in 2000-2001. I am sure that in days to come, other and far more knowledgeable CZ authors will come forward to augment and enrich this theme.[[User:Jeffrey Scott Bernstein|Jeffrey Scott Bernstein]] 23:36, 14 October 2007 (CDT) | |||
It's a great start. Some parts need to be rewritten since the paraphrasing is a little too close to the source material in places. For example, | |||
The sentence "''The combination of prefabricated components and site construction supervised by the firm of Fox and Henderson (contractors, engineers and ironmongers from Birmingham) enabled Paxton, along with Fox and Henderson, to deliver the Crystal Palace on time.''" looks as if it is from http://www.mcgill.ca/mchg/pastproject/cristal/ [[User:Chris Day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris Day|(talk)]] 02:48, 15 October 2007 (CDT) | |||
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Note: I wrote this in association with my wife, who works at the National Fairground Archive at the University of Sheffield (U.K.). The original information was put together for an exhibit inside the university library. The inclusion of these particular World's Fairs was dictated by the reference material available within the NFA. Obviously, there have been many more World's Fairs. I suppose that reference can be made to the disastrous Millennium Dome in England in 2000-2001. I am sure that in days to come, other and far more knowledgeable CZ authors will come forward to augment and enrich this theme.Jeffrey Scott Bernstein 23:36, 14 October 2007 (CDT)
It's a great start. Some parts need to be rewritten since the paraphrasing is a little too close to the source material in places. For example, The sentence "The combination of prefabricated components and site construction supervised by the firm of Fox and Henderson (contractors, engineers and ironmongers from Birmingham) enabled Paxton, along with Fox and Henderson, to deliver the Crystal Palace on time." looks as if it is from http://www.mcgill.ca/mchg/pastproject/cristal/ Chris Day (talk) 02:48, 15 October 2007 (CDT)