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It's a great start. Some parts need to be rewritten since the paraphrasing is a little too close to the source material in places. For example, one sentence i happened to notice when i was linking Crystal Palace was "''The combination of prefabricated components and site construction supervised by the firm of Fox and Henderson (contractors, engineers and ironmongers from Birmingham) enabled Paxton, along with Fox and Henderson, to deliver the Crystal Palace on time.''" This looks as if it is from a web site at [http://www.mcgill.ca/mchg/pastproject/cristal/ McGill University]. [[User:Chris Day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris Day|(talk)]] 02:48, 15 October 2007 (CDT) | It's a great start. Some parts need to be rewritten since the paraphrasing is a little too close to the source material in places. For example, one sentence i happened to notice when i was linking Crystal Palace was "''The combination of prefabricated components and site construction supervised by the firm of Fox and Henderson (contractors, engineers and ironmongers from Birmingham) enabled Paxton, along with Fox and Henderson, to deliver the Crystal Palace on time.''" This looks as if it is from a web site at [http://www.mcgill.ca/mchg/pastproject/cristal/ McGill University]. [[User:Chris Day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris Day|(talk)]] 02:48, 15 October 2007 (CDT) | ||
Darn, you're absolutely right, Chris. How upsetting. I'll smack my wife around for that. Haha. Let me change it.[[User:Jeffrey Scott Bernstein|Jeffrey Scott Bernstein]] 03:10, 15 October 2007 (CDT) | Darn, you're absolutely right, Chris. How upsetting. I'll smack my wife around for that. Haha. Let me change it. P.S. Since my wife and some of her co-workers wrote the first draft (years back), I have no idea if there are other near-verbatim lines lurking about. [[User:Jeffrey Scott Bernstein|Jeffrey Scott Bernstein]] 03:10, 15 October 2007 (CDT) | ||
:The only reason i noticed was the odd phrase of "contractors, engineers and ironmongers from Birmingham" it didn't seem to be the same style as the rest. Please don't smack her around too much :) [[User:Chris Day|Chris Day]] [[User talk:Chris Day|(talk)]] 06:21, 15 October 2007 (CDT) | |||
::No, no, Chris, you were absolutely correct to point this out, and I thank you very much for it; and it would be a disaster if any other near-verbatim lines remain. I hope there aren't, because the idea of it distresses me greatly.[[User:Jeffrey Scott Bernstein|Jeffrey Scott Bernstein]] 06:36, 15 October 2007 (CDT) | |||
Latest revision as of 06:36, 15 October 2007
Note: I wrote this in association with my wife, who works at the National Fairground Archive at the University of Sheffield (U.K.). The original information was put together for an exhibit inside the university library. The inclusion of these particular World's Fairs was dictated by the reference material available within the NFA. Obviously, there have been many more World's Fairs. I suppose that reference can be made to the disastrous Millennium Dome in England in 2000-2001. I am sure that in days to come, other and far more knowledgeable CZ authors will come forward to augment and enrich this theme.Jeffrey Scott Bernstein 23:36, 14 October 2007 (CDT)
It's a great start. Some parts need to be rewritten since the paraphrasing is a little too close to the source material in places. For example, one sentence i happened to notice when i was linking Crystal Palace was "The combination of prefabricated components and site construction supervised by the firm of Fox and Henderson (contractors, engineers and ironmongers from Birmingham) enabled Paxton, along with Fox and Henderson, to deliver the Crystal Palace on time." This looks as if it is from a web site at McGill University. Chris Day (talk) 02:48, 15 October 2007 (CDT)
Darn, you're absolutely right, Chris. How upsetting. I'll smack my wife around for that. Haha. Let me change it. P.S. Since my wife and some of her co-workers wrote the first draft (years back), I have no idea if there are other near-verbatim lines lurking about. Jeffrey Scott Bernstein 03:10, 15 October 2007 (CDT)
- The only reason i noticed was the odd phrase of "contractors, engineers and ironmongers from Birmingham" it didn't seem to be the same style as the rest. Please don't smack her around too much :) Chris Day (talk) 06:21, 15 October 2007 (CDT)
- No, no, Chris, you were absolutely correct to point this out, and I thank you very much for it; and it would be a disaster if any other near-verbatim lines remain. I hope there aren't, because the idea of it distresses me greatly.Jeffrey Scott Bernstein 06:36, 15 October 2007 (CDT)